The visit from the singing inspector

I'm Benny and I want to tell you what happened yesterday. I was terrified because Mr Raymond was shouting at all of us. I was so scared I wanted to leave the big room he called us big bunch of idiots every one hated him and no one took lessons with him.I couldn't  sing because my voice was breaking from Mr ᖇ, he is so loud so rude and very serious I just wanted to call him a bully.

My friends voice was so low and my voice was so bad. We couldn’t sing anything at first. But then we thought of singing Doh Ray me. We both stopped at the same time in the middle of the verse it was Like we were out of breath. He shouted at us like we were 68 year olds. We both felt like we were animals well we were singing like animals. We both told our parents on our this and our parents said they are not going to sing if they don’t want to. Now we got to do big exams with the big boys like Paula and Jack Long.